Le Mot Juste | Writing senryu poem example | 021509

Le mot juste
Raindrops on a dry
field.

I am
a flat field, receiving
raindrops.

Ken Wagner on Haiku Habits

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6 thoughts on “Le Mot Juste | Writing senryu poem example | 021509

  1. I love the bilingual wit and the meaning of this one – but I think it might be overly constrained by its form.
    Would “raindrops / on a dry field” work? Or is there a more strikingly poetic way of expressing it for you?

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