Roof Peaks | Snow haiku poem example | 120408

A-frame roof
peaks against the
sliding snow.

Ken Wagner on Haiku Habits

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4 thoughts on “Roof Peaks | Snow haiku poem example | 120408

  1. I’m sure this is my lack of understanding English, plus my lack of understanding technical stuff, but I don’t see it. The snow slides because of the sloping roof, that I understand, but what does it mean that the roof peaks against it?

  2. My image was of an A-frame roof pointed upward in protection, like hands in prayer. Something like –

    A-frame roof
    peaks in prayer against
    sliding snow.

    Do you think that is any better/clearer?

  3. It doesn’t seem practical. The snow slides because of the slope of the roof, so why would we want a slope to prevent snow from sliding?

    And then, we *want* the snow to slide, or the roof would collapse.

    If the “prayer” would be for the snow not to pile up too high, or for the roof to hold, I would understand.

    Or maybe I just don’t understand snow. Here we hardly ever get more than a few centimeters, and it hardly ever takes more than a week for it to melt.

  4. No, you are right on to what I am trying to communicate – I want the snow to slide; the roof to protect. What about:

    A-frame roof
    peaks in prayer –
    snow slides down.

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