Sunlight Glistens | Sun haiku poem example | 120308

Sunlight glistens
on frozen asphalt. I
shiver and squint.

Ken Wagner on Haiku Habits

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5 thoughts on “Sunlight Glistens | Sun haiku poem example | 120308

  1. I see your point, but I like this one.

    I like the contrast between the sensations – flash of the sun vs. cold freeze. Two different prompts, but the same reaction – the muscular contraction of a shiver or a squint. Yet, the two types of contractions are very different.

    I also like the rhythm and unexpected sounds.

    No?

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