I like this one. I think what keeps it from being bland and makes it work is the double sense of “still,” and the image of tree trunks remaining rooted as the branches sway.
This one started much longer, but eventually distilled down to these three words.
It took me a while to separate the signal from the noise. Who would have thought that an idea, already containing fewer than 17 syllables, could still contain the unnecessary.
Unless, of course, the entire idea were rubbish in the first place!
Now that’s minimal! As short as “Madam, I’m Adam” — and arguably as poetic.
Oh so minimally poetic, Ken
good one,
wishes,
devika
I like this one. I think what keeps it from being bland and makes it work is the double sense of “still,” and the image of tree trunks remaining rooted as the branches sway.
This one started much longer, but eventually distilled down to these three words.
It took me a while to separate the signal from the noise. Who would have thought that an idea, already containing fewer than 17 syllables, could still contain the unnecessary.
Unless, of course, the entire idea were rubbish in the first place!
” Who would have thought that an idea, already containing fewer than 17 syllables, could still contain the unnecessary.”
You and me!
LOVE it. Perfect.
Superb!
‘ku dos.
To be able to write so boldly and economically is a rare talent, Ken. That one really blows me away!
Pun intended, Brian, right?!
im doing haiku in class and its my favorite peom