Comments on: Snow Melts | Snow haiku poem example | 021309

By: Ken Wagner

Ken Wagner — Mon, 16 Feb 2009 22:09:18 +0000

Thanks, Dave and Caroline.

Gautami – I like the poem very much. For some reason, I think “melts” may work better than “melted”. Cheers!

gautami tripathy — Mon, 16 Feb 2009 16:08:50 +0000

in the warmth
of my thought
snow melted outside

Caroline — Sun, 15 Feb 2009 05:53:14 +0000

this website is great. <3 the haiku overdose.

Dave Bonta — Sun, 15 Feb 2009 03:35:10 +0000

I like this.

Ken Wagner — Sun, 15 Feb 2009 03:19:10 +0000

You are correct, Devika. Too abstract. Let me try another revision. Thanks for pushing.

Was –
Snow melts
on a flat field -
Indifference

devika — Sun, 15 Feb 2009 02:57:10 +0000

You got that feeling?
Street or field, melting snow conveys warmth –
I mean the idea — I have never seen snow or snow melting

wishes,
devika

Ken Wagner — Sat, 14 Feb 2009 03:24:27 +0000

Was –
Snow melts
on a flat street -
Indifference