Snow Melts | Snow haiku poem example | 021309

Snow melts
on a flat field – What happened
to us?

Ken Wagner on Haiku Habits

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7 Comments

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7 Responses to Snow Melts | Snow haiku poem example | 021309

  1. Was –
    Snow melts
    on a flat street -
    Indifference

  2. You got that feeling?
    Street or field, melting snow conveys warmth –
    I mean the idea — I have never seen snow or snow melting :)

    wishes,
    devika

  3. You are correct, Devika. Too abstract. Let me try another revision. Thanks for pushing.

    Was –
    Snow melts
    on a flat field -
    Indifference

  4. this website is great. <3 the haiku overdose.

  5. in the warmth
    of my thought
    snow melted outside

  6. Thanks, Dave and Caroline.

    Gautami – I like the poem very much. For some reason, I think “melts” may work better than “melted”. Cheers!

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