A gull’s call
answered by a passing
cloud.
A gull’s call
answered by a passing
bus.
Ken Wagner on Haiku Habits
A Passing | Nature haiku poems examples | 020509
Filed under Haiku Poems About Nature
A gull’s call
answered by a passing
cloud.
A gull’s call
answered by a passing
bus.
Ken Wagner on Haiku Habits
Filed under Haiku Poems About Nature
I vote for #2.
I liked both, Ken
The first very poetic..
the second kind of life-like
wishes,
devika
See, to me the second one is actually more poetic.
For me too, the second one is more poetic.
bus drives over
the edge-
gulls call out
A haiku poem
answered by a passing –
poet!
In combination, I thought they were a bit of a haiku spoof.
The mundane nothingness of the cloud transforms into the unexpected force of a bus.
After all, this should be fun, no?
Hi Ken,
There I agree —
And after all this blogging is also fun, no!?
To me commenting is fun, but I am serious with my blogs
Visit sometime when you are free– the second last is a haiku —
http://devika-jyothi.blogspot.com/
wishes,
devika
it should all be fun, if haikuing and blogging is all about fun
thank you, Ken
wishes,
devika
Why not, yes, why not
Walk along death’s icy brink:
Live fully – have fun.
Which is just an attempt to paraphrase the much quoted (here) line of Colonel Sir Richard Burton, the 19th century British explorer, soldier, diplomat, translator, writer, poet and, last but not least, dervish of the Kaderi Order:
‘We dance along death’s icy brink, but is the dance less full of fun.’
The paradox: how can one, time-centred as we are, answer the call of timeless life!?:)
I like both, I like the different scene set up by each of them, I like the fact that this post encourages the reader to think about how small differences in the words in a haiku can make so much difference to the perception of the scene.
Devika and Borut – A dance, indeed!
Crafty Green Poet – Yes, small differences do matter. In haiku, as in nature. Thanks for pointing that out.
I like the contrast of the combo. Nature and human. Because even buses are good. Nice.
comradeharps – Yes, “even buses are good.”
gift of nature
a blooming flowers.
it is a gift of nature.
it is beautiful.
Its not a haiku poem, is it? its about nature and need three lines in 2 stanzas