A gull’s call
answered by a passing
cloud.
A gull’s call
answered by a passing
bus.
Ken Wagner on Haiku Habits
A Passing | Nature haiku poems examples | 020509
February 5, 2009 · 14 Comments
Categories: Haiku Poems About Nature
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Dave Bonta // February 5, 2009 at 9:51 pm |
I vote for #2.
devika // February 5, 2009 at 11:04 pm |
I liked both, Ken
The first very poetic..
the second kind of life-like
wishes,
devika
Dave Bonta // February 6, 2009 at 7:33 am |
See, to me the second one is actually more poetic.
gautami tripathy // February 6, 2009 at 11:36 am |
For me too, the second one is more poetic.
bus drives over
the edge-
gulls call out
Ken Wagner // February 6, 2009 at 9:31 pm |
A haiku poem
answered by a passing –
poet!
In combination, I thought they were a bit of a haiku spoof.
The mundane nothingness of the cloud transforms into the unexpected force of a bus.
After all, this should be fun, no?
devika // February 6, 2009 at 9:37 pm |
Hi Ken,
There I agree —
And after all this blogging is also fun, no!?
To me commenting is fun, but I am serious with my blogs
Visit sometime when you are free– the second last is a haiku —
http://devika-jyothi.blogspot.com/
wishes,
devika
devika // February 6, 2009 at 10:01 pm |
it should all be fun, if haikuing and blogging is all about fun
thank you, Ken
wishes,
devika
borut // February 7, 2009 at 3:05 am |
Why not, yes, why not
Walk along death’s icy brink:
Live fully – have fun.
Which is just an attempt to paraphrase the much quoted (here) line of Colonel Sir Richard Burton, the 19th century British explorer, soldier, diplomat, translator, writer, poet and, last but not least, dervish of the Kaderi Order:
‘We dance along death’s icy brink, but is the dance less full of fun.’
The paradox: how can one, time-centred as we are, answer the call of timeless life!?:)
Crafty Green Poet // February 7, 2009 at 12:30 pm |
I like both, I like the different scene set up by each of them, I like the fact that this post encourages the reader to think about how small differences in the words in a haiku can make so much difference to the perception of the scene.
Ken Wagner // February 8, 2009 at 5:38 pm |
Devika and Borut – A dance, indeed!
Crafty Green Poet – Yes, small differences do matter. In haiku, as in nature. Thanks for pointing that out.
comradeharps // February 9, 2009 at 7:06 am |
I like the contrast of the combo. Nature and human. Because even buses are good. Nice.
Ken Wagner // February 9, 2009 at 8:39 pm |
comradeharps – Yes, “even buses are good.”
krisha ebora // July 28, 2009 at 3:32 am |
gift of nature
a blooming flowers.
it is a gift of nature.
it is beautiful.
noreen // October 19, 2009 at 6:27 am |
Its not a haiku poem, is it? its about nature and need three lines in 2 stanzas