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By: Haiku by Students at AIU (Part 6) « Akita International Haiku Network

Haiku by Students at AIU (Part 6) « Akita International Haiku Network — Sat, 04 Dec 2010 12:05:47 +0000

[...] Ang3lina February 7, 2010 at 3:56 pm [...]

By: Ken Wagner

Ken Wagner — Mon, 08 Feb 2010 18:21:38 +0000

Thanks for your insight, Hidenori.

I get the “17 syllables” question quite often, and it is both helpful – and interesting – to get another perspective on the issue.

I added links to your two sites on the Haiku Habits “Haiku on the Web” page.

Cheers.

By: Hiruta

Hiruta — Mon, 08 Feb 2010 05:32:13 +0000

Many years ago I started English haiku by the 5-7-5 format.
At Mt. Tsukuba
burnishing study, ideas and thoughts
as chestnuts ripen
But some years after, I found it’s better to write haiku in English by the format 3-5-3.
This is more similar to Japanese haiku.
For example, 「少年や」is counted as 5 moras (sho-u-ne-n-ya) in Japanese and makes one line of the Japanese haiku.
In this English translation, it is ‘A boy ― ‘, and is counted as 3 syllables.
In this case, ‘A boy over there’ makes one line in the 5-7-5 format in English haiku, but it gives birth to quite a different image from ‘A boy ― ‘ .
This is because there is quite a difference between the two languages of Japanese and English.
Since then I’ve been trying to write haiku in English by the format of 3-5-3.
But sometimes it doesn’t go perfectly because the word used for each line is made up of varieties of syllables.
Now I think haiku is the shortest form of poetry, which is composed of three short lines.
The most important point is what we want to express by this short form.
Maybe this idea leads to the shortest form of poetry, which is composed of any free short three lines.
Please enjoy writing and reading haiku.
Thank you.

Best regards,
Hidenori Hiruta

By: Ang3lina

Ang3lina — Sun, 07 Feb 2010 20:56:59 +0000

I hope dat u people know that a haiku should have 5 syllables in the first line, 7 in the second line, and 5 in the third.

By: chante

chante — Thu, 26 Nov 2009 03:14:51 +0000

see the snowflakes fall
they are white and beautiful
with all the designs

By: Hiruta

Hiruta — Thu, 21 May 2009 00:09:31 +0000

Hi, how do you do, Mr. Ken Wagner?

I’m Hidenori Hiruta in Akita, Japan.
My haiku about snow is this:
A lost man
in such a blizzard
snow fairy
This haiku appeared in Asahi Haikuist Network by David McMurray with the following haiku written by Chiyo-ni(1703-1775) in Japan:
Plum scented
where has she blown to
snow fairy
translated by David McMurray
We’ve opened the Website: Akita International Haiku Network. The address is this: http://akitahaiku.wordpress.com/.
Would you please enjoy our site and give us a comment? Thank you. Hidenori Hiruta

By: borut

borut — Sat, 07 Feb 2009 07:28:05 +0000

Puffs of silent softness!:)

By: Ken Wagner

Ken Wagner — Fri, 30 Jan 2009 01:14:24 +0000

comradeharps – Based on your poems, you should have not trouble keeping things lively!

gautami – Thanks for the poem. The phrase “misty snow” works quite well. It’s interesting that my poem is one of distance, but yours internalizes the experience – “mysteriously”.

By: gautami tripathy

gautami tripathy — Thu, 29 Jan 2009 12:00:15 +0000

mysteriously
misty snow
enters into my pores

By: comradeharps

comradeharps — Thu, 29 Jan 2009 07:58:06 +0000

That and a wind change has just cooled me down a bit. It’s uinder 40 C now. Thanks.