Mussel Shells | Bay haiku poem example | 012509

5 Responses to Mussel Shells | Bay haiku poem example | 012509

1. gautami tripathy

   January 26, 2009 at 10:22 am

   mussels shells
   stay buried
   seagulls encircle

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2. Devika

   January 26, 2009 at 11:04 am

   Good one, Ken

   wishes,
   devika

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3. Ken Wagner

   January 26, 2009 at 7:40 pm

   I’m not sure if the third line works. I was trying to convey a sense of stillness with vague hints of danger, quick action, the gnashing of a seagull’s beak.

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4. Devika

   January 26, 2009 at 11:38 pm

   You are the one who feels, Ken.
   and the author of it…
   to me it sounded fine.

   wishes
   devika

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5. Ken Wagner

   January 27, 2009 at 9:34 pm

   Thanks, Devika.

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