Comments on: Footprints | Snow haiku poem example | 011109 http://haikuhabits.com/2009/01/11/footprints-snow-haiku-poem-example-011109/ How to Write Short Poems for Personal Growth: A Forum for Examples and Commentary Wed, 09 May 2012 20:49:11 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.com/ By: Ken Wagner http://haikuhabits.com/2009/01/11/footprints-snow-haiku-poem-example-011109/#comment-258 Tue, 13 Jan 2009 00:25:10 +0000 http://haikuhabits.com/?p=1002#comment-258 Thanks, Adriaan and Gautami (I fixed the spelling – sorry!). I hope you like the series.

]]> By: gautami tripathy http://haikuhabits.com/2009/01/11/footprints-snow-haiku-poem-example-011109/#comment-257 Mon, 12 Jan 2009 17:00:33 +0000 http://haikuhabits.com/?p=1002#comment-257 Ken, I like it better. It creates that feeling of danger.

And I am GAUTAMI not Guatami.

*grin*

]]> By: Ken Wagner http://haikuhabits.com/2009/01/11/footprints-snow-haiku-poem-example-011109/#comment-256 Mon, 12 Jan 2009 16:52:48 +0000 http://haikuhabits.com/?p=1002#comment-256 There I go, trapped in my brain again! I wanted this to be spooky, with a sense of suspense – even danger. This is more closely what I meant to convey -

Fresh snow -
A stranger’s footprints in
my back yard

Thanks for the feedback. What do you think of this version, or perhaps it is a separate poem?

Gautami – Thanks for the link!

]]> By: gautami tripathy http://haikuhabits.com/2009/01/11/footprints-snow-haiku-poem-example-011109/#comment-255 Mon, 12 Jan 2009 16:01:40 +0000 http://haikuhabits.com/?p=1002#comment-255 I agree with Adriaan.

in a drab day
footprints
mark my existence

And I have linked you on my blog. Do check it out!

unconnected

]]> By: Adriaan http://haikuhabits.com/2009/01/11/footprints-snow-haiku-poem-example-011109/#comment-254 Mon, 12 Jan 2009 13:10:20 +0000 http://haikuhabits.com/?p=1002#comment-254 Who decides where footprints don’t belong?

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