Comments on: Hawks and Squirrels | Animals haiku poems examples | 010409

By: Ken Wagner

Ken Wagner — Tue, 06 Jan 2009 00:48:28 +0000

Borut - Clever image. May your cage door remain ajar! gautami tripathy - Thank you for the feedback. I am trying to improve in my practice. If you ever have a suggestion, please share. I agree that poetry has its place amongst the hawks. Poetry can soar or scurry. We choose. harps Thanks! - again and again!

By: harps

harps — Mon, 05 Jan 2009 13:08:43 +0000

like it

By: gautami tripathy

gautami tripathy — Mon, 05 Jan 2009 10:49:57 +0000

Circles back works better.

BTW, the hawks in the human world too don’t care for haiku. For that matter any kind if poetry. Maybe they should…

By: Borut

Borut — Mon, 05 Jan 2009 08:32:15 +0000

For hawks of haiku
the seventeen syllables
is a true bird-cage!?:)

By: Ken Wagner

Ken Wagner — Mon, 05 Jan 2009 03:02:40 +0000

Was -
The hawk
turns as the squirrels
bicker.

Changed “turns” to “circles back” in line 2

By: Ken Wagner

Ken Wagner — Mon, 05 Jan 2009 00:18:36 +0000

Even 17 syllables is too long, for a hawk!

By: Borut

Borut — Sun, 04 Jan 2009 21:38:24 +0000

It may well be true
That hawks don’t care for haiku –
Too spiritual!?:)

P.s. Hawks or haiku, or both?!:)