The hawk
circles back as the squirrels
bicker.
Hawks
do not care
for haiku.
Ken Wagner on Haiku Habits
Inspired by Coming From The Woods and commentary
Hawks and Squirrels | Animals haiku poems examples | 010409
Filed under Haiku Poems About Animals
It may well be true
That hawks don’t care for haiku –
Too spiritual!?:)
P.s. Hawks or haiku, or both?!:)
Even 17 syllables is too long, for a hawk!
Was -
The hawk
turns as the squirrels
bicker.
Changed “turns” to “circles back” in line 2
For hawks of haiku
the seventeen syllables
is a true bird-cage!?:)
Circles back works better.
BTW, the hawks in the human world too don’t care for haiku. For that matter any kind if poetry. Maybe they should…
like it
Borut – Clever image. May your cage door remain ajar!
gautami tripathy – Thank you for the feedback. I am trying to improve in my practice. If you ever have a suggestion, please share.
I agree that poetry has its place amongst the hawks. Poetry can soar or scurry. We choose.
harps Thanks! – again and again!