“Your back” would better suggest the intimacy of an encounter, but this was more a moment of recollection. I was on the road, driving into the mountains.
Plus, I’m not sure she would have appreciated my breaking an intimate moment to compare her to the hills, no matter how lovely!
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December 23, 2008 at 10:35 am
delicious
a nicely succint metaphor but underlying resonations too
December 23, 2008 at 12:02 pm
Was -
Curved mountains
covered in clouds -
The small of her back.
I think “hills” works better. Any thoughts?
December 23, 2008 at 8:32 pm
Gerald – Glad you liked it. Thanks for the feedback!
December 28, 2008 at 11:45 pm
See it, feel it, love it.
December 29, 2008 at 7:33 pm
Thank you. I am fond of this one.
January 1, 2009 at 12:27 pm
Wouldn’t “your back” be better?
January 1, 2009 at 10:22 pm
“Your back” would better suggest the intimacy of an encounter, but this was more a moment of recollection. I was on the road, driving into the mountains.
Plus, I’m not sure she would have appreciated my breaking an intimate moment to compare her to the hills, no matter how lovely!
January 2, 2009 at 5:10 am
I see what you mean, but still there is a distance I don’t think really is there in your mind when you think about someone in that way.
Ah well.