Haiku Habits

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  Kris // December 11, 2008 at 1:48 pm | Reply

  I like this one – a vivid, funny, image and a nice half-rhyme.

  I get the impression a lot of twitter haiku writers don’t do a lot with the sound of the words, but from the transliteratoins of Japanese I’ve read, the original poets did.

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  Ken Wagner // December 11, 2008 at 8:08 pm | Reply

  Thanks for the feedback, Kris.

  Rocco the poodle just hit one year. He loves everything, but is especially fond of leaves, ice, and snow. He has been a great – if exhausting – companion in my haiku practice.

  I am trying to pay attention to sound and rhythm – not just the image. Your encouragement means a lot.

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  Dave // December 15, 2008 at 10:19 pm | Reply

  I agree with Kris. I only worry that “delights” might be a little too abstract – though I do like bringing in the narrator’s own emotion. If it were me, I would’ve stayed focused on the dog, but that’s not necessarily the best or most haiku-like way, I think.

  I admire the risks you’re taking here. I wish more people used their blogs this way.

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  Ken Wagner // December 16, 2008 at 11:41 pm | Reply

  Dave -
  Perhaps “delights” is too vague, because the emotion I was trying to capture was the dog’s – he was delighted.

  I admit to being amused at the moment, but the discovery was all his.

  Thanks for your thoughts on the blog process. I thought it would be useful to capture the development of a struggling haiku-er. Perhaps it will also track the emergence of a new personal sense of awareness and action. Or not!