A-frame roof peaks against the sliding snow.
Ken Wagner on Haiku Habits
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I’m sure this is my lack of understanding English, plus my lack of understanding technical stuff, but I don’t see it. The snow slides because of the sloping roof, that I understand, but what does it mean that the roof peaks against it?
My image was of an A-frame roof pointed upward in protection, like hands in prayer. Something like -
A-frame roof peaks in prayer against sliding snow.
Do you think that is any better/clearer?
It doesn’t seem practical. The snow slides because of the slope of the roof, so why would we want a slope to prevent snow from sliding?
And then, we *want* the snow to slide, or the roof would collapse.
If the “prayer” would be for the snow not to pile up too high, or for the roof to hold, I would understand.
Or maybe I just don’t understand snow. Here we hardly ever get more than a few centimeters, and it hardly ever takes more than a week for it to melt.
No, you are right on to what I am trying to communicate – I want the snow to slide; the roof to protect. What about:
A-frame roof peaks in prayer - snow slides down.
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December 5, 2008 at 8:23 am
I’m sure this is my lack of understanding English, plus my lack of understanding technical stuff, but I don’t see it. The snow slides because of the sloping roof, that I understand, but what does it mean that the roof peaks against it?
December 5, 2008 at 9:24 pm
My image was of an A-frame roof pointed upward in protection, like hands in prayer. Something like -
A-frame roof
peaks in prayer against
sliding snow.
Do you think that is any better/clearer?
December 6, 2008 at 6:03 am
It doesn’t seem practical. The snow slides because of the slope of the roof, so why would we want a slope to prevent snow from sliding?
And then, we *want* the snow to slide, or the roof would collapse.
If the “prayer” would be for the snow not to pile up too high, or for the roof to hold, I would understand.
Or maybe I just don’t understand snow. Here we hardly ever get more than a few centimeters, and it hardly ever takes more than a week for it to melt.
December 6, 2008 at 8:57 pm
No, you are right on to what I am trying to communicate – I want the snow to slide; the roof to protect. What about:
A-frame roof
peaks in prayer -
snow slides down.