A squirrel left
this acorn among
scattered leaves.
Ken Wagner on Haiku Habits
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A squirrel left
this acorn among
scattered leaves.
Ken Wagner on Haiku Habits
Filed under Haiku Poems About Animals
I know I’m nagging way too much, but wouldn’t it be better to present this as two separate images? Like this:
This acorn,
left by a squirrel among
scattered leaves.
You could also decide to set the squirrel apart, but whichever you choose, with the focus on one and the other as background, the image becomes sharper, I think.
What about -
These acorns
left by squirrels among
scattered leaves.
Sure. Now what do you do with the acorns? Pick them up and take them home, throw them to a tree trunk, leave them where they are, cover them with leaves?