Comments on: Soggy Socks | Rain haiku poem example | 112508 http://haikuhabits.com/2008/11/25/rain-socks/ How to Write Short Poems for Personal Growth: A Forum for Examples and Commentary Wed, 09 May 2012 20:49:11 +0000 hourly 1 http://wordpress.com/ By: Adriaan http://haikuhabits.com/2008/11/25/rain-socks/#comment-53 Fri, 28 Nov 2008 08:19:21 +0000 http://haikuhabits.com/?p=112#comment-53 Okay, sorry, I really didn’t get the scratching thing. Maybe because I have water proof shoes. :p

About honesty, I think it’s totally okay to change the events to suit your haiku. It’s about how best to get your feeling across, so if the image needs sharpening… If you saw and heard two birds, but one bird works better, one bird it is. Etc.

]]> By: Ken Wagner http://haikuhabits.com/2008/11/25/rain-socks/#comment-52 Fri, 28 Nov 2008 01:21:30 +0000 http://haikuhabits.com/?p=112#comment-52 Spongy, yes, but I had been walking for an hour in cold rain and my wet socks were definitely scratchy! But they were cotton, not wool, so maybe that will help. Honesty, honesty.

Was
Rains falling.
My wet woolen socks
scratch.

]]> By: Adriaan http://haikuhabits.com/2008/11/25/rain-socks/#comment-51 Thu, 27 Nov 2008 08:00:54 +0000 http://haikuhabits.com/?p=112#comment-51 I don’t know. Why aren’t you wearing your shoes in the rain? And what do your socks scratch?

I don’t see wet wool scratching anything at all really, it would seem more like soft and spongy to me.

]]> By: Ken Wagner http://haikuhabits.com/2008/11/25/rain-socks/#comment-50 Thu, 27 Nov 2008 01:28:40 +0000 http://haikuhabits.com/?p=112#comment-50 Original -

Rain taps, taps.
Wet sock steps
scratch.

New version better?

]]> By: Adriaan http://haikuhabits.com/2008/11/25/rain-socks/#comment-49 Wed, 26 Nov 2008 11:31:10 +0000 http://haikuhabits.com/?p=112#comment-49 Wet sock steps scratch? I don’t get it…

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