Haiku Habits

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  Adriaan // November 26, 2008 at 6:31 am | Reply

  Wet sock steps scratch? I don’t get it…

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  Ken Wagner // November 26, 2008 at 8:28 pm | Reply

  Original -

  Rain taps, taps.
  Wet sock steps
  scratch.

  New version better?

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  Adriaan // November 27, 2008 at 3:00 am | Reply

  I don’t know. Why aren’t you wearing your shoes in the rain? And what do your socks scratch?

  I don’t see wet wool scratching anything at all really, it would seem more like soft and spongy to me.

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  Ken Wagner // November 27, 2008 at 8:21 pm | Reply

  Spongy, yes, but I had been walking for an hour in cold rain and my wet socks were definitely scratchy! But they were cotton, not wool, so maybe that will help. Honesty, honesty.

  Was
  Rains falling.
  My wet woolen socks
  scratch.

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  Adriaan // November 28, 2008 at 3:19 am | Reply

  Okay, sorry, I really didn’t get the scratching thing. Maybe because I have water proof shoes. :p

  About honesty, I think it’s totally okay to change the events to suit your haiku. It’s about how best to get your feeling across, so if the image needs sharpening… If you saw and heard two birds, but one bird works better, one bird it is. Etc.